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Bill Gates


I've listed this article for peer review because, having spent over two years refining its prose and references and being a significant contributor, I believe that receiving suggestions to enhance the article to FA-class status would be immensely valuable. Gates played a pioneering role in the microcomputer revolution of the 1970s and 1980s. Additionally, he oversees the world's largest private charitable foundation. I look forward to collaborating with the community to enhance the article and elevate its overall quality.

Thanks, MSincccc (talk) 15:33, 18 April 2024 (UTC)

Tim O'Doherty
Up to Post-Microsoft:
 * His father was named William H. Gates II, but he is now generally known as William H. Gates, Senior to avoid confusion with his son. - Citation needed
 * a national bank president - can we have the name of the bank?
 * a home that was damaged by a rare tornado when Gates was seven years old - how reliable is this source?
 * According to Gates, when he was young, his parents wanted him to pursue a career in law - I don't think the second comma is needed or the "when he was young". Do we need "according to Gates": is there a reason as to why he might not be reliable here?
 * Link bugs?
 * Recommend merging paragraphs 4 and 5 in Early life and education.
 * which Gates has described as - "which Gates described as"?
 * National Merit Scholar - should this be capitalised?
 * didn't - MOS:CONTRACTIONS: "did not".
 * Gates never returned to Harvard to complete his studies needs a ref
 * You've linked Microsoft in the second paragraph of BASIC, but could be linked in the first instead.
 * he wrote an Open Letter to Hobbyists -> "he wrote An Open Letter to Hobbyists".
 * The last two paragraphs of BASIC are very short: can they be combined elsewhere?
 * after Gates's mother, Mary Maxwell Gates - you've already given us her name and linked it before.
 * IBM's discussions with Digital Research went poorly, however, and they did not reach a licensing agreement - is the ", however," needed?
 * It was the prestige brought to Microsoft by IBM's adoption of their operating system that would be the origin of Microsoft's transformation from a small business to the leading software company in the world - seems oddly worded
 * on November 20, 1985, in an attempt - I'd drop the comma
 * it's a neat hack - is the link to Hacker culture right?
 * @Tim O'Doherty Should this be removed -Gates's maternal grandfather was J. W. Maxwell, a national bank president. Also, what should I do about point number 3 mentioned above?
 * It's your choice whether to keep it or remove it. I'm asking if the source cited to that info is reliable and high-quality enough for an FA. Tim O&#39;Doherty (talk) 17:52, 20 April 2024 (UTC)


 * @Tim O'Doherty Would you continue reading till the end of the article and provide further suggestions? It would be great if you could do so. In the meantime, I had make some required changes. Regards. MSincccc (talk) 18:27, 20 April 2024 (UTC)