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Bill Ponsford

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This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I am looking for general assistance in tidying the prose, fixing any punctuation anomalies and eventually creaing an article of FA standard. Specifically, I am looking for assistance in making the cricket jargon comprehensible to non-cricket fans and in making sure the baseball section actually makes sense (I enjoy watching baseball, but the subtleties of the sport still elude me). Thanks in advance for any assistance. -- Mattinbgn\talk 22:46, 4 February 2009 (UTC)

'' alongside Brian Lara, is the only man to twice score more than 400 runs in an innings. '' - should it say 'only men' ? The sentence doesn't sound right.
 * Working on this one (and struggling to find an elegant phrasing) -- Mattinbgn\talk 11:02, 5 February 2009 (UTC)

His bat, much heavier than the norm and nicknamed "Big Bertha", allowed him to cut and drive powerfully. - just wanted to be sure that this is what the reference says. Normally a heavier bat would hamper the cut.
 * Checked this and it is me stretching a little. Reworded. -- Mattinbgn\talk 11:02, 5 February 2009 (UTC)

''a 388 run partnership. Bradman would go on to make 304.[74] The partnership was the highest ever for Australia in Test cricket '' - need not stop with Australia - it was the world record for any wicket.
 * True, and reworded -- Mattinbgn\talk 11:02, 5 February 2009 (UTC)

''Australian team to tour England in 1926. He was the youngest player in the squad, with nine of the fifteen players over the age of thirty six.'' - They had one player named Sam Everett who was even younger. Tintin 00:46, 5 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Claim watered down and explanatory note added. Also see Sam Everett. -- Mattinbgn\talk 11:02, 5 February 2009 (UTC)