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Billy DeBeck
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The article contains a thorough overview of the subject's life and work, it is fully referenced, fairly well illustrated and, as far as I can tell, it isn't missing any important details. I'm aiming at getting this article to GA status.

Thanks,  C üRly T üRkey  Talk Contribs 07:40, 8 May 2012 (UTC)

Comments
 * Not sure you need to link "American".
 *  C üRly T üRkey  Talk Contribs 21:56, 18 May 2012 (UTC)


 * Lots of text squashed between images looks very unprofessional.
 * Moved them around.  C üRly T üRkey  Talk Contribs 21:56, 18 May 2012 (UTC)


 * "popular in the 1920s and 1930s, featured a number of popular characters" overuse of "popular".
 * Reworded.  C üRly T üRkey  Talk Contribs 21:56, 18 May 2012 (UTC)


 * " in a "big-foot" style." I don't know what that means at all. Should you link Bigfoot?
 * I've reworded it in a way that I hope is more clear.  C üRly T üRkey  Talk Contribs 21:56, 18 May 2012 (UTC)


 * "on the South Side of Chicago" any reason for the capitalisation of South Side?
 * Decapitalized.


 * " had copied from Dana" was Dana referred to as Dana? Seems odd, but if so, then no problem.
 * He was referred to as "Dana" in the source, but I'm not sure how widespread that is. I've changed it.   C üRly T üRkey  Talk Contribs 21:56, 18 May 2012 (UTC)


 * "In May 1915, he and a partner named Carter" perhaps tighten up, "he and partner Carter"...
 *  C üRly T üRkey  Talk Contribs 21:56, 18 May 2012 (UTC)


 * Image captions that are complete sentences need a period.
 *  C üRly T üRkey  Talk Contribs 21:56, 18 May 2012 (UTC)


 * "he had become a runt." excuse my ignorance but I'm not sure what that means, is runt of use?
 * Reworded.  C üRly T üRkey  <sup style="margin-left:1.5ex;">Talk <sub style="margin-left:-5ex;">Contribs 21:56, 18 May 2012 (UTC)


 * Not sure about five columns for refs, one or two (max) is fine.
 * Actually, I'm using the |colwidth parameter rather than a hard number of columns. Setting the number of columns can cause problems for certain users, and is unflexible.  By setting the column width, it will automatically display a different number of columns depending on your screen width and resolution.  C üRly T üRkey  <sup style="margin-left:1.5ex;">Talk <sub style="margin-left:-5ex;">Contribs 21:56, 18 May 2012 (UTC)


 * Check ISBNs are either italics or not (I suggest not) but not a mix.
 *  C üRly T üRkey  <sup style="margin-left:1.5ex;">Talk <sub style="margin-left:-5ex;">Contribs 21:56, 18 May 2012 (UTC)

The Rambling Man (talk) 17:55, 18 May 2012 (UTC)


 * Thanks for taking the time to look over this.  C üRly T üRkey  <sup style="margin-left:1.5ex;">Talk <sub style="margin-left:-5ex;">Contribs 21:57, 18 May 2012 (UTC)