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Bob Cousy Award

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This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because this is going to be a part of a featured topic and I would like some feedback on the writing.

Thanks, — Chris!  c t 06:15, 5 May 2009 (UTC)

Comments from "6-time"-->six-time
 * "a list of players are nominated " "are"-->is
 * "16 players from each divisions"-->16 players from each division
 * I think it would be good background info if you mentioned how many times the Celtics won in the time period that Cousy was with the team.
 * "The North Carolina Tar Heels men's basketball team have had the " "have"-->has
 * "The most recent winner is Ty Lawson from University of North Carolina." Needs "the" after "from". Dabomb87 (talk) 01:07, 10 May 2009 (UTC)

Giants2008 comments - My apologies for the delay; it's been a long day for me here. Only a couple of things that stuck out to me, since Dabomb has given this a good review already. To beef up the third paragraph, a sentence on the first winner could be added, like most recently featured lists on sports awards. Also, I think "men's basketball team" can safely be dropped from the Tar Heels, since the first sentence of the lead makes clear that the award is for male players.  Giants2008  ( 17-14 ) 02:59, 10 May 2009 (UTC)

The Rambling Man (talk) 19:56, 11 May 2009 (UTC)
 * Comments from
 * I think we're supposed to avoid bold links in the opening sentence? And is that really the full name of the trophy?  If so, perhaps the list needs a rename?
 * Probably should state it's a basketball award in the opening sentence.
 * Lead image could be bigger, if memory serves you can go up to 300px according to the MOS.
 * Three paras in the lead is too much for a list this long - two max.
 * Link Hall of Famer to the appropriate hall..
 * "The North Carolina Tar Heels men's basketball team has had the most winners, with two. " feels a bit forced, like trivia for trivia's sake. I would trim it down and leave it to the list in this case.
 * Done all. Thanks. To TRM: All my award lists (eg. NBA Coach of the Year Award) bold the title, so I am not sure. As for renaming, I thought we use common name. And the common name is Bob Cousy Award.— Chris!  c t 22:11, 11 May 2009 (UTC)
 * For the bolded link, I think we can ignore the rules here. Alternatively, you can put The Hartford in a See also section. Dabomb87 (talk) 22:40, 11 May 2009 (UTC)
 * Done - added to See also section— Chris!  c t 23:07, 11 May 2009 (UTC)