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Bob Kane

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 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for July 2009.

This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because as the co-creator of Batman, he has an important place in comics history, and has GA plus potential. There are a few sourcing issues, but nothing tremendous. Any suggestions you can provide would be helpful (where to look, any books you know of). Anything else you think this article needs to really help it shine, be bold and speak up.

Thanks, BOZ (talk) 02:18, 26 July 2009 (UTC)

Comments - thanks for an interesting article. I hope you can take a little criticism. The Lead is much too short, it should summarise the whole article. The Early Life section, also, needs more: where was he born, who were his parents, did he have any siblings? The article relies heavily on quotations—there are too many. I suggest not using quotations unless they are particularly interesting or entertaining in their own right. It is best to paraphrase and provide the citation of course. I noticed at least one dead link in the references. I suggest always using "and" and not "&" unless it forms part of an official title. I realise from your request for books that you recognise that the article needs more details. I am sorry I cannot help, but I wish you luck. Everyone loves Batman. Graham Colm Talk 13:39, 26 July 2009 (UTC)