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Burnside Fountain
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because it is an article about a rather quirky statue in Worcester Massachusetts that is a sort of mascot for the city. I feel i have covered the topic and am looking at perhaps nominating for Good Article.

Thanks, Found5dollar (talk) 02:01, 25 June 2012 (UTC)

Comments
 * Lead image in the infobox is cool but somewhat overwhelms the lead because it's so large...
 * Shrunk image--Found5dollar (talk) 11:34, 3 July 2012 (UTC)


 * "non-working drinking " I think "non-functioning" be better.
 * done.--Found5dollar (talk) 11:34, 3 July 2012 (UTC)


 * Not entirely convinced you need to link bronze, it's a pretty common term.
 * un-linked--Found5dollar (talk) 11:34, 3 July 2012 (UTC)


 * "Due to Harvey committing suicide before.."-> "Harvey committed suicide before... leaving Sherry Fry to..."
 * fixed--Found5dollar (talk) 11:34, 3 July 2012 (UTC)


 * I'm not sure why you have "USD $5,000", you could just link the $ or alternatively remove the D because right now it's US dollar dollar...
 * I was under the impression that that was the correct way to write and link monetary units. I'll fix it.--Found5dollar (talk) 11:34, 3 July 2012 (UTC)


 * Worcestor Common is over linked in the lead.
 * fixed--Found5dollar (talk) 11:34, 3 July 2012 (UTC)


 * "Since then there has been one successful theft in 1970" odd way of putting it, why not "The statue was stolen in 1970..."
 * fixed


 * "the Manneken Pis is one for Brussels." don't need the "one".
 * removed


 * Dimensions only include two dimensions, the basin looks like it's three-dimensional to me...
 * those are the only two dimensions I can find references for....--Found5dollar (talk) 20:38, 4 July 2012 (UTC)


 * Don't have the "unfortunate" quote in both the text and a quote box.
 * removed the box quote--Found5dollar (talk) 20:38, 4 July 2012 (UTC)


 * Again, think about the USD $ thing and in any case, don't over link it.
 * removed--Found5dollar (talk) 20:38, 4 July 2012 (UTC)


 * "showing it's bright green" its.
 * fixed--Found5dollar (talk) 20:38, 4 July 2012 (UTC)


 * "Sadly" - POV.
 * removed.--Found5dollar (talk) 20:38, 4 July 2012 (UTC)


 * I think you mention it's commonly referred to as Turtle Boy about five times in the article, once or twice (i.e. once in the lead, once in the article) would be sufficient.
 * removed alot of the repetition.--Found5dollar (talk) 20:38, 4 July 2012 (UTC)


 * "a substantial amount for a Reddit posting. " ref?
 * removed as i can not find a ref for that.--Found5dollar (talk) 03:29, 5 July 2012 (UTC)

fixed--Found5dollar (talk) 20:38, 4 July 2012 (UTC)
 * References section should come before External links.
 * Works, such as The New York Times should be in italics in the refs.
 * done.--Found5dollar (talk) 03:29, 5 July 2012 (UTC)

The Rambling Man (talk) 12:11, 1 July 2012 (UTC)