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Cúcuta

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 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for July 2008.

This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I think is a good article and I just need suggestions to improve it.

Thanks, User:Ricardocolombia (talk) 06:42, 7 July 2008 (UTC)
 * Sorry, I didn't see your message on my talk page; I don't think I'll have time to review the whole article, but I've quickly looked over it and I'll try to help.


 * "Its altitude is 320 m above sea level, with an average temperature 28°C and annual average precipitation of 1,041 mm." Remove that from the lead, and merge the third and fourth paragraphs; three is probably good for an article this size.
 * If possible (not a requirement, just preferred), try to remove the citations from the lead: just make sure you write about it further down and cite a source there (ex. about the border being the most active international one: that could go in geography, with the citation there rather than in the lead). However, everything in the lead should be mentioned further down, at least in passing.
 * The maps, climate, and population can go alongside the text like normal images; try not to break the flow of the text if you can help it.
 * Whenever possible, don't have lists (like the one I'm making now :)). For example, the first one, with the zones, towns, and settlements, is probably necessary. However, for the people, you could write a paragraph and mention them each in a sentence (same with bridges, monuments, and parks). For the schools, universities, and distances to other cities, I don't think it's necessary to list them at all; maybe it would be better to just mention them in passing (and mentioning a few of the more important ones in the text).
 * "The Anthem of Cúcuta was legalized by means of Decree 039 of February 8, 1984, by Mayor Luis Vicente Mountain Forest. The lyrics were written by Dr. Manuel Orillo Martínez, and the music by the master Pablo Tarazona Prada. It was chosen as the Anthem of Cúcuta by a unanimous vote in a contest held in the Theater Zulima." I selected that at random, and it's unsourced. Try to find sources for all the facts (25 for an article of this size is far too few: if you notice featured articles, they have a citation for nearly every sentence in the article).
 * "Congress of Cúcuta," "Constitution of Cúcuta," "Earthquake of Cúcuta," "Flag of Cúcuta," "Seal of Cúcuta," "Anthem of Cúcuta," "US–Colombia Free Trade Agreement implications for Cúcuta." No need to remind us, it's unlikely we'll forget the name halfway.
 * Good luck, and sorry again for the delay and short review. · AndonicO  Engage. 09:51, 8 July 2008 (UTC)