Wikipedia:Peer review/CFB Shilo/archive1

CFB Shilo
Well, this is my first big leap into the wonderful world of Peer Review. Any suggestions would be helpful. Please don't bite the noob. Size of this page is apparently becoming a problem, please comment to the CFB Shilo Discussion page Weaponofmassinstruction 06:31, 11 Jan 2005 (UTC)
 * I don't know anything about this subject, so I will restrict myself mainly to comments on style and structure.
 * My first impression is that the article is too fragmented. Either there are too much headings, or the paragraphs are too short. If you're not planning to expand the article significantly, I'd cut down on the headings.
 * The article lacks sources/references. If the two external links are your only sources, it might be a good idea to indicate them as such.
 * Bolding headings is not in accordance with the Manual of Style. I fixed it for you, along with fixing a typo.
 * Hope this gives you a start!  &mdash; mark &#9998; 15:36, 18 Jan 2005 (UTC)