Wikipedia:Peer review/Call of Duty: World at War: Zombies/archive1

Call of Duty: World at War: Zombies
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because anything Call of Duty can and will attract many editors from the Video Games project here to improve articles such as this one. It's not in the main series and it's the only COD game on iOS. I would improve on it but I simply don't have the time nowadays, so I am putting this up for peer review so someone can follow any tips to improve this in the future.

Thanks, SixthAtom (talk) 15:47, 12 February 2011 (UTC)

Interesting but I think you should add different weapons or maps/levels. --Taekyukim91 (talk) 22:56, 17 February 2011 (UTC) Actually the maps are explained well haha sorry. But I would like to see more about the different weapons and perks. --Taekyukim91 (talk) 23:04, 17 February 2011 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Thanks for your work on this article - have to say I missed the Nazi zombies in the WWII history books I read ;-), here are some suggestions for improvement. Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 05:19, 19 February 2011 (UTC)
 * A model article is useful for ideas and examples to follow. There are many FAs in Category:FA-Class video game articles and one seems like it would be an especially good model for this - Call of Duty 4: Modern Warfare
 * The article is quite short and so there is not a whole lot to say, but here are some ideas.
 * The lead is supposed to be a summary of the whole article, and as such nothing should be in the lead only. However, there are things only in the lead, like Ideaworks Game Studio developing it, or it being for the iOS, or wi-fi networks.
 * The things that are only in the lead are all things that can be expanded on in the article. I think the article could be more explicit that iOS is an Apple product.
 * How is playing the game on an iPad / iPhone different from playing other COD games on other computers / systems (touch screen vs controller / mouse / keyboard)?
 * Make sure the article is up to date - in the lead It will offer purchasable downloadable content in the form of new maps in the future.[3][4] is sourced to 2009 articles - surely by now the new maps have been released (and seem to be mentioned in the article later).
 * No mention of critical responses
 * The Development section really is not about development (how the game came to be, before it was available for sale) as much as some later extensions.
 * The Development section has no references and needs them. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
 * German words should have translations provided
 * No images? Most game articles have at least one fair use image
 * Watch WP:OVERLINKing
 * Make sure to provide context to the reader and make sure to write about this fictional world from an out-of-universe perspcetive - see WP:IN-U
 * Please make sure that the existing text includes no copyright violations, plagiarism, or close paraphrasing. For more information on this please see Wikipedia_Signpost/2009-04-13/Dispatches. (This is a general warning given in all peer reviews, in view of previous problems that have risen over copyvios.)
 * Thanks man. SixthAtom (talk) 01:35, 21 February 2011 (UTC)