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Canadian federal election, 1993
One of the most important and interesting Canadian elections in recent years. I've been working on this article recently, trying to bring it up to FA level. It almost certainly needs some copyediting. It would also be great to get some image of campaigning, but getting free ones would be difficult. - SimonP 03:02, 20 October 2005 (UTC)
 * I'd be warying of using nicknames like "Tory". Few people outside Canada, and non-experts inside Canada, will know what that is. Although, I do like how the term covers both the PCs and John Tory. Are there references for the polling numbers? You don't have to answer this but, where are the references used in the article? The article is dominated by the campaign narrative, perhaps add some explanation of how the vote is set up (first past the post), voter turnout, and other more technical matters. The finance section needs a table (especially where comparing numbers). Otherwise, nice narrative, great national results table (the small text makes it easy to go through). However, the results table is probably the most pertinent topic of the article, why hide it at the bottom? --maclean25 04:18, 20 October 2005 (UTC)

Those are some SWEET tables Simon! Anyway, it does need a bit of work in places. Moreover just needs another pass or two for structure... Ryan Norton T 22:26, 21 October 2005 (UTC)
 * 1) For one thing the lead would probably be better off as two paragraphs and it needs to be a bit longer.
 * 2) In "Background" the first paragraph is too short - try merging it with something.
 * 3) "Campaign" - There are quite a few shortish paragraphs here.
 * 4) "Issues" - last paragraph too short... expand or merge :)
 * 5) Well, and there are several short paragraphs here and there...
 * 6) In general could benifit from a couple more images
 * 7) External links? Just kidding - I don't think this one really needs any :).


 * You should check your use of commas carefully. I've fixed one instance of a misplaced comma, but there are many more, and I'm getting too much Wikipedia lag to have time to edit them all. RSpeer 05:30, 23 October 2005 (UTC)


 * Very minor, but the two diagrams of the seat distributions (Image:Elec1988.PNG and Image:Elec1993.PNG) aren't quite consistent. The Liberals seem to have gotten a bit pinker in 1993, and one images is slightly larger than the other. Pburka 03:25, 24 October 2005 (UTC)

This is an excellent article. Here are some things that can be improved, in my opinion:


 * 1) You should reference sources for poll numbers, Campbell's quotes, analyses of voter behavior and analyses by political scientists.
 * 2) In the sentence, These factors combined to make Mulroney the least popular leader since opinion polling began in the 1940s, does "leader" mean "prime minister?"
 * 3) For the benefit of non-Canadians, you should explain the five-year rule that required Campbell to call the election.
 * 4) At what date were the PCs close in the polls to the Liberals?
 * 5) Who does "they" refer to in this sentence: They failed to get literature distributed to the local campaigns, forcing each candidate to print their own and preventing any unified message.
 * 6) How could the 1993 campaign have taken place during the "late 1980s recession?" The article on that recession says it ended in 1991.
 * 7) As this is not a scholarly journal, you should explain who "Jackson and Jackson" are and use their full names in the text.
 * 8) I would consider seriously trimming the minor-party section. I think only the National Party is noteworthy. Mwalcoff 02:59, 30 October 2005 (UTC)