Wikipedia:Peer review/Castlevania: Dawn of Sorrow/archive1

Castlevania: Dawn of Sorrow
Hello. Recently, this article acquired GA status, and I'm interested in bringing it to FA quality. Given that I haven't written or significantly contributed to a FA quality article before (and ergo, a lack of experience with WP:FAC), all comments and suggestions would be greatly appreciated. Regards, Sephiroth BCR  ( Converse ) 23:22, 22 October 2007 (UTC)


 * Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR t 02:29, 23 October 2007 (UTC)


 * Off the bat I see one uncited sentence: After the player completes the game, Julius Mode is unlocked, similar to the Julius Mode in Aria of Sorrow. I'm sure a review noted this and it should be no problem to cite it, otherwise everything past the comma should be removed. hbdragon88 04:44, 27 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Citation added. Sephiroth BCR  ( Converse ) 04:55, 27 October 2007 (UTC)


 * There's a fair amount of primary sourcing (as in, the manual and in-game dialogue), which is to be avoided wherever possible. I strongly encourage you to find as many alternatives as is possible. You should be able to use any information on the story in walkthroughs from reliable sources, such as IGN. You may be able to pick up some detail regarding gameplay in reviews and previews. Una LagunaTalk 11:00, 28 October 2007 (UTC)


 * The primary sources are appropriate (WP:SELFPUB), considering that notability has already been determined. Furthermore, much of the gameplay information is only specifically mentioned in the manual. As for the plot details, no reliable source besides the game itself covers them in adequate detail. Numerous FA-class video game articles (Golden Sun, Final Fantasy XII) use liberal amounts of primary sources in any case. Sephiroth BCR  ( Converse ) 21:10, 28 October 2007 (UTC)


 * Sounds like you know more about what I was talking about than I do >_>... and "that Final Fantasy article" did cross my mind, but I couldn't remember which one it was and was too lazy to find it for myself. You're either very good at getting out of doing lots of work, or are absolutely correct. My money's on the latter. Una LagunaTalk 21:36, 28 October 2007 (UTC)