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Charlie Chaplin filmography
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I've listed this article for peer review because Charlie Chaplin is one of the major contributors to the development of the art of screen comedy and also to the art of cinema in general. The previous incarnations of the Chaplin filmography weren't that detailed or well organized. I beleive that my version is an improvement. I've used the filmographies that have attained "Featured List" status as a model for this one. So, give a look, tell me what you think, and perhaps watch a Chaplin film or two in the meantime.

Thanks, Jimknut (talk) 22:33, 30 September 2009 (UTC)

Brianboulton comments: A tidy list. Prose needs some attention, though. Not much else to quibble at. Looks broadly in line with other featured filmogaphies. Brianboulton (talk) 18:32, 11 October 2009 (UTC)
 * Text
 * "He was born in London and began his film career in 1914 with Keystone Studios, where he established his tramp persona." Need to add the information that he went to America, and clarify that he began his film career there.
 * Changed. The info is now more detailed and clearly states that he went to America.
 * "...through first First National" The "first" is redundant. And lose comma after First National
 * Fixed.
 * The parenthetical note (He denied these allegations) needs to be absorbed into the sentence. Thus: "...Chaplin came under attack with allegations, which he denied, that he was Communist sympathizer."
 * Changed per your suggestion.
 * Sentence needs reorganising: "Having remained a British subject, he found his American re-entry permit rescinded while travelling to England in 1952 to attend the première of his film, Limelight." Suggestion: "He had remained a British subject and, after travelling to England in 1952 to attend the première of his film, Limelight, his American re-entry permit was rescinded."
 * Also changed per your suggestion, except that "after travelling" is worded as "while travelling". Acording to the Robinson bio, Chaplin received the news about the rescission while sailing to London from New York.
 * "...after nearly two decades away..." - "away" is redundant
 * Changed.
 * Sentence needs completing: "The following year Chaplin's score for Limelight received the Best Music."
 * Changed to read: "The following year Chaplin's score for Limelight received the Academy Award for Best Music."
 * Tables
 * What is a split-reel?
 * Changed to explain that a split reel is "two films on one reel".
 * Can an indication be given as to the length of a reel, otherwise descriptions such as one-reel or two-reel have little meaning.
 * Changed. No explanation is given but I've now hyperlinked "reel" several times in the document.
 * It might be worth noting the name of the producer for A Countess from Hong Kong
 * The name of the producer (Jerome Epstein) is now listed.
 * Cartoons: What does this actually mean: "Chaplin "appeared" as himself in the following animated cartoon shorts"? If the cartoons were depictions of Chaplin but he had nothing to do with the productions, then they should not be in his filmography.
 * Cartoons have been dropped.
 * Likewise, biopics made after his death shouldn't be included, not even as "Addenda"
 * Ditto (The "Addendum" section has been alotted "hidden text" status.)
 * I have also reworded some of the text in the intro section and also in the beginning of "Chaplin's official films".

Thanks so much for the suggestions. If you can give it a second look I'll take any other suggestions into consideration. After that I'll request feature status. BTW, is it okay to strike through your suggestions, or should I have left them the way they are? Jimknut (talk) 22:09, 11 October 2009 (UTC)