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Charlie Sheen

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 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for September 2008.

This peer review discussion has been closed. I got this article to GA a while back, and I was thinking of maybe promoting up to FA quality. Any comments are welcome, please, even if you think the article is really bad, just say so.

Thanks, -- Music 26/  11  12:35, 7 September 2008 (UTC)

Finetooth comments: I see that you are having a problem finding free-use images, and I don't know what to suggest. However, I have some other thoughts about improving the article.


 * The biggest problem here involves unsourced claims and the lack of care about fairness to a living person. For that reason alone, I would not call this a good article. Examples include the claim that Sheen shot a girlfriend and the claims about Sheen's relationships with Ginger Lynn and Heather Hunter. Unsourced claims about living people are especially unwise. You can't assume anything. Even if Sheen says that he did A, it does not follow that he therefore did B. I recommend being much more cautious about the gossipy claims even if sourced. For example, if Sheen denied Itzler's allegations, it is unfair to use the verb "revealed" for what Itzler did. "Alleged" would be more accurate. The article violates a core Wikipedia principle. It is not entirely verifiable. Please see WP:V.


 * A once-over by a good copyeditor would help catch things such as the missing "the" in "... Bud Fox in 1987 film... " in the second sentence of the lead and the grammar problems in the first sentence of the second paragraph of the lead. The first sentence of the "Early life" section is a run-on that might be better re-cast as two sentences. I see other run-ons. A copyeditor would probably catch and fix these.


 * The paragraphs that begin the "Personal life" section would be better if expanded or combined. Such short paragraphs are generally deprecated.


 * Recent changes to the Manual of Style suggest unlinking the dates. See MOS:UNLINKDATES.


 * I see some overlinking involving two or more links next to each other in the text, so that it looks like one link. An example is "... in the Vietnam War drama Platoon (1986)." To fix this particular one, I'd suggest unlinking "drama", which is well-understood by most readers.


 * The "Awards" section is too short to be a separate section.

I hope that you find this review helpful and that you work further on the article. Finetooth (talk) 04:43, 14 September 2008 (UTC)