Wikipedia:Peer review/Christopher Polhem/archive1

Christopher Polhem
I've been working on this article for the past few days, salvaging a so-so article with fuzzy information to a rather coherent article, pulling info mainly from Nordisk familjebok (Swedish encyclopedia now in the public domain). As there aren't many non-Swedish sources of this, I'm requesting a peer review for this one so that there's at least one good English source on Christopher Polhem to refer to. Feel free to add any English sources stating the same information as the Swedish ones to the references section. O bli (Talk) 17:25, 30 December 2005 (UTC)
 * It's a decent enough article, although I think it could probably stand further expansion. The text gets a little comma-happy in a couple of places and needs some fine polishing by an editor. The one place where I thought there might be an issue is in the "Other accomplishments" section. The bulleted list there should be replaced by normal prose. Thank you for your work on this. :) &mdash; RJH 16:14, 17 January 2006 (UTC)
 * No specific comments. But there is a lot written on Polhem (including a major work by Sten Lindroth and critical editions of Polhem's letters and other writings in several volumes), and before it could be featured it should utilize recent research. You should probably begin with the article in Svenskt biografiskt lexikon, which is more up-to-date than NF and gives you more references to continue with. u p p l a n d 08:56, 24 January 2006 (UTC)
 * Will do, thanks, my school probably has access to all of that stuff. O bli (Talk) 17:40, 24 January 2006 (UTC)