Wikipedia:Peer review/Clipperton Island/archive1

Clipperton Island


I've listed this article for peer review because I've made a bunch of changes and expanded the article quite a bit. I would like some help with cleaning this article up a bit, get some nudges in the right direction, and get shown somethings I might have missed.

Thanks,  Dr vulpes  (💬 • 📝) 05:18, 5 April 2023 (UTC)

Comments from Z1720
Comments after a quick skim:


 * Ref 177: According to WP:RS/P, this is a deprecated source and should probably not be used. ✅: Found a book on EU law and the history of areas like Clipperton so it's a much better source.  Dr vulpes  (💬 • 📝) 20:29, 12 April 2023 (UTC)
 * "Jost, Christian H. (1 July 2005).", "Jost, Christian H. ", "Pitman, R.L.; Jehl, J.R. (1998).", "Skaggs, Jimmy (1989)." and "Tamburini, Francesco (2008)." are listed as sources, but do not have any inline citations pointing to them. Either they need to be used as inline citations, or if they already are the sfnp template needs to be fixed. ✅: I forgot all about this clean up task. Went though and all but one of them weren't being used in the article so they were removed. Going to go back over the rest of the sources in the list and just get rid of it as they're not highlighting anything important are are just a hangover from the import from the French version.  Dr vulpes  (💬 • 📝) 00:13, 13 April 2023 (UTC)
 * "Aside from the lagoon and water caught from rain, no freshwater sources are known to exist." needs a citation ✅: Good catch, went back and added the two best sources that explain this.  Dr vulpes  (💬 • 📝) 20:16, 12 April 2023 (UTC)
 * Per WP:LEDECITE, citations are usually not needed in the lede as the information is in the article body.
 * There's a lot of information in the history section. Is it all needed? Anything that can be removed as insignificant events, or reduced down? Try to merge one-sentence paragraphs.
 * Per WP:GALLERY, the photos and media section probably should not be there. ✅: Done!  Dr vulpes  (💬 • 📝) 22:13, 23 April 2023 (UTC)

Those are my thoughts. Z1720 (talk) 14:57, 12 April 2023 (UTC)