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Color of the day (police)

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 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for October 2008.

This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I spend a lot of my time here doing wikignoming or doing dispute resolution via WP:3O or WP:MEDCAB and only occasionally create new articles or do major mainspace edits. So I'd like an opinion on this article I've created from scratch. I don't ever expect it to be WP:GA or WP:FA but think it could be improved beyond what I've done to B class perhaps. I'm trying to do more mainspace edits because although it is my declared intention to be mostly involved in dispute resolution, I think that a mediator should first and foremost be a good and experienced mainspace editor. Please be as critical as you'd like: I have an extremely thick skin :-)

Thanks,  fr33k man   -s-  04:34, 8 October 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here. Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 04:55, 17 October 2008 (UTC)
 * The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way - I think this should be at least two paragraphs per WP:LEAD
 * Article is in serious need of more references - there are citation needed tags and the whole "Purpose" section and the last 4 or 5 sentnces in History have no refs. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
 * Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. cite web and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
 * I think See also is for links not otherwise in the article, but NYPD is already in
 * I think more concrete, specific examples owuld help and could be used to expand the article.
 * Per WP:CITE references come AFTER punctuation, and are usually at the end of a sentence or phrase
 * ANy chance for some images (even one)?