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Common Travel Area
I'm listing this article as I'd particularly like some feedback from someone unfamiliar with the topic. (Comments from people familiar are welcome as well of course!) Ways of improving the structure and/or heading would be of particular help. Frankly I've been looking at this article for way too long and need a fresh perspective. Caveat lector 23:14, 20 August 2007 (UTC)

Thanks for asking for the review. The subject seems noteworthy and you have a good start at the article. However, I believe several changes are in order.

Throughout the article, it would help to break long, complex sentences into short sentences which each address only one idea.

The initial sentence needs to be rewritten, as the current language implies that the Republic of Ireland is part of the United Kingdom.

The lead says "there has never been a formal agreement," but the 1922 section says "an agreement to this effect was reached between the two sides." That's confusing. In 1952, was there "an agreement" or only a unilateral change to the UK's "relevant immigration law?"

I'm confused as to why Ireland would have been "required to follow changes in British immigration policy" in the absence of a formal agreement.

Is the section about EEA nationals actually relevant in an article about the CTA?

I believe the Schengen section should be retitled, "Effect of potential Schengen integration" or something like that. I was halfway through the section before I realized it was about a hypothetical change.

Is there research indicating public opinion about the CTA, EEA and Schengen integration?

In practical terms, what does the CTA's existence mean to citizens of the area and to international visitors from outside the EEA?

VisitorTalk 23:33, 20 August 2007 (UTC)