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Connie Talbot
I've listed this article for peer review because I feel it is around good article level, and wondered if anyone had comments before I nominate. I started editing the article because I had followed Britain's Got Talent, then started referencing it to adhere to WP:BLP concerns that were raised. I then realised I had started it, so I may as well 'finish' it, and so wrote it up to the current standard. I have no specific concerns, but any comments anyone has are extremely welcome. Thanks, J Milburn (talk) 15:57, 26 December 2007 (UTC)
 * Since the nomination, I have nominated for good article status. Comments are still very welcome, and it will probably be a while until it is reviewed anyway, due to the backlog. J Milburn (talk) 17:18, 3 January 2008 (UTC)

Review by DrKiernan
The following suggestions were generated with the aid of a semi-automatic javascript program. Thanks, DrKiernan (talk) 17:56, 28 December 2007 (UTC)
 * I would shift the fair use image, to the top right corner of the article, inside the infobox.[?]
 * An image in the infobox would have to be a free image. The fair use image is specifically to show what she looked like during Britain's Got Talent. There has already been a fair fuss about that image, and it's really going to have to stay where it is to comply with our fair use rules. I have contacted someone (not sure if it is a webmaster, publicist or whatever) and requested a free picture, so fingers crossed! J Milburn (talk) 18:37, 28 December 2007 (UTC)
 * Please add  along with the required parameters to the article - see Persondata for more information.[?]
 * ✅ J Milburn (talk) 18:37, 28 December 2007 (UTC)
 * Per Wikipedia:Context and Build the web, years with full dates should be linked; for example, if 15 January, 2006 appeared in the article, link it as 15 January, 2006.[?]
 * ✅ J Milburn (talk) 18:37, 28 December 2007 (UTC)
 * As per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (dates), dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of (if such appeared in the article) using 30th January was a great day, use 30 January was a great day.[?]
 * ✅ J Milburn (talk) 18:37, 28 December 2007 (UTC)
 * Please ensure that the dates are all in the same format; some are day first, others are month first. For a British-related subject matter, they should all be day first.
 * Thanks for the review! J Milburn (talk) 18:37, 28 December 2007 (UTC)

Skeeker
I've never reviewed anything before so I'm not sure if I missed anything important, but, the only thing I can see that should be fixed is: "show singing The Wizard of Oz's "Somewhere Over The Rainbow".[3]", the link to "Somewhere Over The Rainbow" is a redirect, maby put this in place: "Somewhere Over the Rainbow". I'm not sure if redirects are bad, but I personally like the original link, and the T in "The" shouldn't by capitalised. I hope I can help a little, I've never reviewed before this, but it is an interesting article and looks good. Thank you, Burningclean &#91; Speak the truth! &#93; 03:31, 30 December 2007 (UTC)
 * ✅ Fixed to correct, and correctly formatted, title. Thanks for the review! J Milburn (talk) 14:07, 30 December 2007 (UTC)

M3tal H3ad
You should of left me a message on my talk page ;p M3tal H3ad (talk) 05:39, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
 * but was eventually beaten by - no need for "eventually" (redundant!)and i don't like the word "but", how about - although was beaten by...
 * ✅ J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
 * she was signed temporarily with Sony BMG, but the label then dropped her. - saying temporarily and being dropped by the label is redundant?
 * ✅ Removed "temporarily". J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
 * which was released November 26, 2007 in the UK. - released on November...?
 * ✅ J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
 * The first single from the album, "Over the Rainbow"/"White Christmas", has been released, saying a single is released is redundant
 * ✅ That comes from the fact information was added as it was published. J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
 * "lost out" doesn't give the encyclopedic vibe
 * ✅ J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
 * "£1 million-link the pound or euro? sign
 * ✅ J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Simon Cowell is linked twice closely and his fullname is used twice in succession
 * ✅ J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Rainbow Recording Company, an offshoot of record label Rhythm Riders made specifically for Connie,[2] was due to release Connie's first album on November 26, 2007,[9] and it was later reported that the album was named Over the Rainbow, and the first single, "Over the Rainbow"/"White Christmas", was due to be released on December 3, 2007. This is one sentence :O suggest splitting after November 26, 2007
 * ✅ J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
 * November 16, 2007. full date need linking
 * ✅ J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
 * was certified Gold in early - I'm not sure here but should "gold" be capitalized?
 * ✅ Though I have linked to this article, I have realised that I should be linking to the British equivilent, here, and the BPI doesn't capitalise on its website, so I will remove the capitalisation. J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
 * on This Morning - on the daytime television show This Morning, just like the nightclub thing with Metallica ;p
 * ✅ I suppose that's fine, as I had linked to the programme above. J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
 * is the same song that she sang at her grandmother's funeral.
 * ✅ J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Over The Rainbow links to Over the Rainbow
 * ✅ Skeeker mentioned that, seems I missed the discog section... J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Categories in alphabetical order
 * ✅ That's never occurred to me... J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)
 * I will next time! Thanks very much for the review. J Milburn (talk) 13:59, 2 January 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch

 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style. If you would find such a review helpful, please click here. Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 03:04, 5 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Read it, but it didn't help much. Dates are fine, working on an image and have had a few people read through it. J Milburn (talk) 11:48, 5 January 2008 (UTC)