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Consequentialism
I have been working on this article for a couple of months with some helpful edits by others, but I feel that the page may too much reflect my own vision of what an article of consequentialism should be (not that this article is my POV, I hope). I would appreciate any comments, but particularly on any major areas I have overlooked. Any suggestions? Ig0774 01:25, 10 March 2006 (UTC)

Circeus 01:24, 17 March 2006 (UTC)
 * Leads need expansion badly.
 * It's possible that an article series template is appropriate. You might want to look in related article to see if there is one.
 * there is no apparent reason for the John Stuart Mill picture to be where it is.

Caravaca 08:20, 30 March 2006 (UTC)
 * Overall: massive improvement on previous version; great stuff; I'd make my students read this.
 * Balance, structure and length: good. Future editors should try to keep topic additions in offshoot articles rather than adding to this one.
 * Style: occasionally woffly or epic, but that happens to me too when I write too much. Some rephrasing and sharpening might be good at a number of points.
 * Opening definition: possibly add a couple of sentences to say what consequentialism is not, as well as what it is (e.g. distinguish briefly from deontology and virtue ethics).
 * Mill picture: keep until something better comes along.
 * Too many references to Peter Singer? The 3rd time isn't really necessary.