Wikipedia:Peer review/Craig Nicholls/archive1

Craig Nicholls
I would like to know what more can be done to improve this article. Jade1984 05:30, 9 July 2007 (UTC)

Review by karanacs

 * Moog goes to a disambig page in the lead. It should probably go directly to the page you want.
 * song titles should be in quotes "My Song Here" Album titles should be italicized.
 * The article needs a good copyediting. Just a few examples from the first main paragraph:
 * "enroll himself" -> "enroll"
 * "He used to attend" -> "He attended ..., until dropping out of school during tenth grade."
 * "He supplied his vocation with money" ????
 * Don't use his first name when referring to him (after the first instance) -- just Nicholls
 * full dates need to be wikilinked (September 19, 2002)
 * all quotations need a source immediately following them
 * A large part of the article has no sources
 * You might want to include more information in the Success and Vision Valley sections -- what did the critics think of their albums? What did they do to make them banned on Leno and Letterman?  What about the concerts was almost total chaos?

Good luck Karanacs 18:58, 11 July 2007 (UTC)