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Curtis (50 Cent album)

 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for June 2008.
 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for June 2008.

This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because it will show what needs to be done for the article to be a featured article.

Thanks, Shadyaftrmathgunit (talk) 15:12, 20 June 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: I removed the semi-automated peer review as it: 1) does not follow directions above; 2) takes too much space for PR; 3) breaks semi transclusion, so no one else can see the review request. Feel free to strike the review in WP:PRA/JN08. Thanks, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 02:15, 23 June 2008 (UTC)

Interesting article, while it is clear that a lot of work has been put into it, some more is needed to improve it further. Here are some suggestions for improvement: Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 02:53, 27 June 2008 (UTC)
 * A model article is useful for ideas to follow. There are many FAs at Featured_articles, a lot of which are on albums.
 * The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself - Kingdom Come is only in the lead.
 * My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way, but Lyrics are not in the lead as one example. Please see WP:LEAD
 * There are a lot of short (one or two sentence) paragraphs that should be combined or perhaps expanded.
 * Article needs a copyedit, one example - these sentences could be combined to something like ''50 Cent stated that the album was inspired by his life before his commercial debut, Get Rich or Die Tryin' . He also stated [, and] that he chose the album's title because he was known as "Curtis" before he became famous.[8]
 * Article needs more references, for example all of the lyrics quoted seem to be uncited. The first lyrics quote also seems very long for fair use. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref. See WP:CITE and WP:V
 * The images were copyvio and so could not be on Commons (I noted them as copyvio there). I do think that the Rolling Stone cover could be used here under Fair Use (on Wikipedia). Not sure if the others could be used here or not.
 * Many albums have a brief sound clip or two to illustrate the music styles etc. See some of the model FA articles.
 * Quoting the entire Track listing seems too detailed
 * Refs look OK, please make sure all sources meet WP:RS
 * Please use my examples as just that - these are not an exhaustive list and if one example is given, please check to make sure there are not other occurrences of the same problem.