Wikipedia:Peer review/Darwin High School/archive1

Darwin High School
I've listed this article for peer review because I want to know if it is detailed enough and if any improvements can be made upon it. There may also be grammatical changes required which were over looked upon the editing process.

Thanks, Rofl2018 (talk) 12:13, 9 November 2018 (UTC)

Comments from AustralianRupert: G'day, Rofl2018, thanks for your efforts so far. I have a few suggestions: AustralianRupert (talk) 07:39, 22 November 2018 (UTC) * the article needs a lead section, which summarises the whole article <s?* I have added the article to a category, but if possible I suggest trying to find a few more categories that might be relevant and adding the article to those as well
 * an image or two if possible would be great to break up the text. There are a number of images on Commons that could be used. They can be found here:
 * the language is not neutral in some areas, for instance: "Students with a passion for literature will analyse difficult texts using sophisticated language to formulate complex pieces of work that is of a high calibre". If it is someone's opinion, it should be attributed as such, and also referenced, otherwise it should be rewritten in more neutral terms
 * where the same reference is used multiple times it can be combined into a WP:NAMEDREF
 * don't use all caps in titles per WP:ALLCAPS
 * the External links section should be removed as it currently has no relevant links
 * the article needs more internal/wikilinks per WP:WIKILINK


 * More general than WP:ALLCAPS, MOS:CAPS says to use sentence case rather than title case except for proper nouns. This includes sentence case for section headings. Mitch Ames (talk) 12:36, 22 November 2018 (UTC)

Comments from Originalmess: This review and the original requester haven't been active since November. I'll try to copyedit/fix the references, but this might be worth closing soon. originalmess how u doin that busta rhyme? 19:06, 21 January 2019 (UTC)
 * Done. It's in much better condition now and I've removed the NPOV tag and added one on sourcing. Striking out suggestions I've completed.  originalmess  how u doin that busta rhyme? 20:44, 21 January 2019 (UTC)