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David McDowall (criminologist)
I've listed this article for peer review because I want to know what other editors think needs to be added/improved before it can have a chance at becoming a GA.

Thanks, Everymorning (talk) 16:03, 29 June 2016 (UTC)

If I were reviewing this for GA, here's what I'd say. The only remaining thing I'd look at for GA would be broadness of coverage. I did a little Googling and I don't see any obvious omissions. The article is short, but if you correct the lead issue I don't see any reason this wouldn't pass GA. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 23:54, 7 August 2016 (UTC)
 * The lead is too short -- it is supposed to summarize the article, per WP:LEAD. That in turn means that the body needs to include everything in the lead, which is also not the case right now.
 * The prose is fine; sources seems good, though I haven't checked to see if they support the information in the article.
 * Everything is cited.
 * It's neutral and seems to have no editorial bias.
 * It's stable.
 * No images, so no image problems.
 * Thanks, I have expanded the lead. Let me know if you think there's anything wrong with it now. Everymorning (talk) 00:09, 8 August 2016 (UTC)
 * Well, the lead shouldn't include anything not in the body, but the body doesn't say he is a criminologist and doesn't give his birth date. How about starting the Education section with "David McDowall was born in 1949.  He received his B.A. ..." and then adding "of criminology" to whichever of his academic positions supports that title.  If they are all sociology professorships, and not specifically criminology, you'd need another source for "criminologist". Mike Christie (talk - contribs -  library) 00:13, 8 August 2016 (UTC)
 * I have tried to change the article to correspond to your suggestions; please let me know if you think it's good now. Everymorning (talk) 00:33, 8 August 2016 (UTC)
 * Yes, I think that does it. Good luck at GA. Mike Christie (talk - contribs -  library) 00:52, 8 August 2016 (UTC)