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Deadalive
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to see it promoted to FA one of these days. I've been working on it for about a year now, and it's a GA, as well as an A-class article. I just underwent its first copyedit. Any assistance would be excellent. Thank you, Gen. Quon   (Talk)   18:23, 17 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Previous peer review

Comments The Rambling Man (talk) 19:51, 30 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Would you consider the "series' overarching alien mythology" as a story arc? I've seen it referred to as such.
 * "viewed by 12.4 million viewers" bit repetitive with the "view..." thing.
 * " After the body of alien abductee Billy Miles's (Zachary Ansley) body" too many bodies?
 * "threatens Skinner with nanobots" not sure what that means really. If someone threatened me with nanobots, I'd just squish them and carry on...
 * You wait to the third para to link "alien" and "abduction".
 * You link vital signs in the main body but not in the lead, why?
 * "In the previous episode" you mean "In the final episode of the previous series" or something similar.
 * Image captions which aren't complete sentences shouldn't have a period.
 * "burying the man[…]just " spaces...
 * Not sure there's a genuine need for a picture of strawberry jam.
 * Is it Miles's or Miles'?
 * What is "a Swiss facial mask"?
 * Thank you very much for your comments. How does the article look now?-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   21:06, 30 January 2013 (UTC)

Comments
 * "Meanwhile, rogue FBI agent Alex Krycek (Nicholas Lea) uses Skinner nanobot blood infection as leverages tries to get him to kill Scully's unborn child." -- I think there is a missing/incorrect word here (I'm not sure what it's trying to say)
 * "...causing the veins in Skinner's neck bulge, making him stumble." -- I think you mean "causing the veins in Skinner's neck to bulge, making him stumble."?
 * Scully gets a new lab report, which says that Miles has (literally) became a new person. -- I don't understand this -- new DNA?
 * Spotnitz later called the directing "fantastic" - a little clarity; -> Spotnitz later called the directing of "Deadalive" "fantastic"
 * "an 11-percent share" dash isn't needed  Ruby  2010/  2013  22:13, 1 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks a ton! I believe I have got them all.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   01:03, 2 February 2013 (UTC)