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Denver Broncos seasons

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 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for June 2008.

This peer review discussion has been closed. Hopful I can get this to FL status at some piont.

Thanks, Buc (talk) 19:58, 17 June 2008 (UTC)

The Rambling Man (talk) 08:54, 18 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Comments from
 * Avoid bold links in the lead per WP:MOS.
 * Put (NFL) after National Football League.
 * Remove full stop in caption - it's a sentence fragment so it doesn't need a full stop per WP:MOS.
 * Four paras in lead is too much for such a short article - see WP:LEAD.
 * Explain what AFC is before you use it.
 * Link Super Bowl.
 * Explain what a "losing season" is.
 * "...and were AFC West champions twice and AFC champions once." and.. and... reads clumsily.
 * "two years in a row" prefer "for two consecutive years"
 * "have also experienced one notable periods of decline" ?!
 * "when they never made the playoffs " just "did not make the playoffs" is better.
 * "They also had their two worst seasons " ..." They also experienced their..." would be better.
 * "But they never made the playoffs prior to the AFL-NFL merger in 1970." don't start a sentence with "But..." and avoid this "never made..." stuff.
 * Explicit references required for the "Coach of the Year" etc awards.
 * Explain the significance of "The Drive" and "The Fumble" for non-experts.
 * "sportsecyclopedia.com. " or "Sports Encyclopedia"? Same site is given different parameters.
 * All done. Buc (talk) 07:11, 19 June 2008 (UTC)