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Disability in North Korea
I've listed this article for peer review because it's a fairly new article I wrote, but I'm not at all familiar with North Korean topics. In spite of my attempts to solicit contributions from topic specialists, no other editor has made any substantive contributions to the article yet. From various discussions, on and off WP, I've become aware that many apparently reasonable sources about human rights in North Korea are regarded as discredited or unreliable. Thus, the main purpose of this review is to check the sourcing, neutrality and overall "fairness" of the article.

Thanks, Roger (Dodger67) (talk) 14:37, 18 August 2016 (UTC)

Yo! I will give my comments about the issues I find
 * Tintor2 (talk) 16:09, 26 August 2016 (UTC)
 * First of all, the lead is quite unbalanced. I would recommend to use a two long paragraphs lead without a source (unless it's controversial info) per WP:Lead
 * The use of dates are inconsistent. Decide between day-month-year or month-day-year.
 * Also, avoid short sentences. Think like you are writing a formal letter.
 * Sections "Alleged infanticide of babies with birth defects" and "Sport" feel really small. Try expanding them or merge them with other sections.

That's all I could find. If you have free time, I would like if you commented on my peer review. Regards.


 * Thanks for the input so far, Unfortunately I'm under some pressure in my academic work so I might only get around to these improvements in a few weeks. Roger (Dodger67) (talk) 08:14, 4 September 2016 (UTC)