Wikipedia:Peer review/Dolphinarium/archive1

Dolphinarium
Especially want opinions on references and neutrality (mainly looking at the animal welfare aspect). English is not my native language, so a critical look at spelling and grammar is also appreciated. Have done a lot of work on the article, and it is currently the selected article on the Cetaceans portal. I hope to get it to "Good Article" status at least. BabyNuke 20:34, 10 August 2006 (UTC)
 * I've given it a quick copyedit, but it could do with another pass as I mainly removed redundancy rather than rewriting.
 * It's let down badly by lack of inline citation - with a topic like this inline citations help counter arguments of bias (and make you think about the statements you make)
 * Try to avoid 'it is claimed','some people say', 'this is disputed' etc. - give specific examples or don't include the claims.
 * Some defense of dolphinariums by owners or organizations (if there is any) may help balance the article.
 * The "suicide" section is very POV at the moment - I'd try to decribe the actions of the dolphin without attributing the action directly (unless you have reliable quotable sources to back up the claims)
 * You should standardize on a capitalization scheme for the common names of the species - WikiProject Cetaceans probably has a policy on this.
 * Hope this helps Yomangani talk 01:18, 11 August 2006 (UTC)

Thank you for your comments and edits! I will work on the points mentioned. BabyNuke 09:41, 11 August 2006 (UTC)


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