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Don Boven

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This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I want to make it better. My goal would be for it to someday be a FA, but I'm not sure if there is enough information available on this basketball player to make that possible. Any suggestions for improvement are welcome.

Thanks a lot-- Eva  b  d  18:41, 7 May 2008 (UTC)
 * Comments from
 * Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (numbers), there should be a non-breaking space -  between a number and the unit of measurement.
 * Can you add a couple more paragraphs to the lead? It doesn't meet WP:LEAD at the moment.
 * Is this a reliable source? Find an alternate.
 * See if you can add a "See Also" section (just a suggestion)
 * That's it from me. «  Milk's Favorite Cookie  (  talk  /  contribs ) 01:30, 14 May 2008 (UTC)

Rurfisch comments: Agree with the above. Here are a few more ideas for improvement: Hope this helps, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 00:45, 29 May 2008 (UTC)
 * A model article is useful for ideas for expansion, and as a guide for style, refs, structure, etc. I note that there are four FA articles on NBA players at Category:FA-Class NBA articles.
 * I would see if you can find old newspapers or old magazines that covered his career for more sources. Google Books or Google Scholar or databases might also be useful. This would be library work.
 * If my math is right, he was only 41 when he retired from coaching - my guess is that the NBA and coaching did not pay as well then as they do now - what did he do from age 41 till whenever he retired again?
 * You might want to use convert templates for units
 * What is there looks good, hopefully you can find some more sources and ideas.