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Dysart, Fife

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 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for August 2008.

This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because i would like to know if my efforts will be successful enough to acquire start class for the article. I know that the article can do with some more pictures, a shorter better written introduction and maybe do with another section - governance (which i have been pending) but on a general view does this stand any chance.

Thanks, Kilnburn (talk) 15:57, 7 August 2008 (UTC) It would certainly now qualify as start class, but it has a ways to go before it moves much higher. In particular, here's a look at the lead: If you'd like some additional feedback, please respond here, and I'll continue my review... MeegsC | Talk 15:14, 13 August 2008 (UTC)
 * Comments from MeegsC
 * Be sure to mention which country Dysart belongs to; don't assume your readers will know that Fife is part of Scotland!
 * What on earth does the sentence The origins of the actual town were discovered into a record around 1220... mean to say?
 * There should be no gaps between punctuation (or the end of a word) and an associated reference number. Like this.  Not like this.
 * Is the "Sinclair" family important enough to have a Wikipedia article? If so, link to it.  If not, briefly explain who they are and why they're important.
 * Who is David I? If there's a Wikipedia article on him, link to it.
 * Read WP:MOS regarding "em-dashes"; all your in-sentence dashes should be converted to em-dashes.
 * There is a misplaced clause in the sentence The town became known for various industries such as nailmaking, linen, coal and salt [5] - which for the latter went into direct competition with their neighbour, Kirkcaldy in 1244. [6] "The latter" here refers to salt—which most certainly did not go into direct competition with Kirkcaldy! : )
 * Is it Tolbooth or Tollbooth? And why is this (and Town House) capitalised?