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Emma Willard
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I have been working on this article for my U.S. Women's History class and would appreciate any suggestions or comments because I am new to Wikipedia. I would like to make sure that there are no grammatical errors, formatting issues and that overall the article is sufficient.

Thanks, Kaliwhitney (talk) 00:41, 13 December 2011 (UTC)

For someone who is new to Wikipedia, well done, just some technical details you need to fix. All the best. The Rambling Man (talk) 15:20, 18 December 2011 (UTC)
 * Comments
 * Lead is a little short, take a look at WP:LEAD for advice on how long it should be and what it should contain (e.g. a summary of the major points of the article).
 * No images at all you could include?
 * Probably more logical to link women's rights activism than American.
 * Link Troy Female Seminary first time.
 * Section headings should follow WP:HEAD, so things like "Early Life" should be "Early life".
 * Is there a good link for New York Legislature? Yes, there is but you should link it the first time you use it rather than later on.
 * Last para of Career section is entirely unreferenced.
 * Last part of Marriage and Family (should be family) is unreferenced.
 * " in 1839.[8] [4]" order them numerically and remove the space between them.
 * No need to link Europe, most of our readers will know what that means without a link.
 * A lot of Later Life (should be Later life) is unreferenced.
 * Bare URLs in the references need to be fixed.
 * Ref 7, page range needs to use an en-dash (see WP:DASH).
 * Same for ref 11.
 * Last "External link" is really an external link as it doesn't link to anything.