Wikipedia:Peer review/Evanescence/archive2

Evanescence
I've listed this article for peer review because…
 * Previous peer review

Evanescence's articles were in decent shape when I found its articles. At the time, I had only listened to Fallen, but as I edited their articles and learned about them more, I listened to them more at the same time, and found them very enjoyable (I have all three of their studio albums now). Now, I noticed this article is delisted from GA. Maybe we can fix that. But first, we'd need to go here. I know there are links to archive and tags to resolve but we're pretty close...at least it looks that way.  danny music editor  Speak up! 23:06, 7 October 2016 (UTC)


 * I'll give a review. Don't feel obligated but I have my own music related PR request open here. Freikorp (talk) 22:41, 2 November 2016 (UTC)
 * Intro
 * "Evanescence No. 71 on the Best Artists of the Decade chart". When were they ranked?
 * Considering you don't specify the full date for the first two albums, I don't see why you need to give it for the third (October 11, 2011). The year alone should be sufficient.
 * "their new album" - maybe it's time to drop 'new'. It's clear which album they were promoting.
 * There's no indication in the lead of what the band has been doing since 2012. That's a long time.
 * History
 * Consider wiki linking Amy Lee and Ben Moody in the first sentence. It's the first time they appear in the body.
 * "The band eventually appeared live". When?
 * Obviously the open citation request is a problem.
 * The first appearance of 'Bring Me to Life' is not wiki linked, but the second is.
 * 'My Immortal' is wiki linked twice.
 * "The equally popular" - Consider rewording, they were both popular, but I don't think any two songs are exactly equally popular.
 * Remove hashtags as per MOS:HASH
 * Can you find a reference that each song was "promoted by a music video"? Official music video links themselves should be sufficient but third part coverage is always better. Perhaps some commentary on the music videos themselves.
 * "In addition, Fallen is No. 6 at the "Top Bestselling Albums of the Last 10 Years". After selling more than 7 million copies in the United States alone and 17 million worldwide." This is unsourced. It is also too short to be a stand alone paragraph. Consider merging, and consider dropping 'In addition'.
 * "The music video for "Call Me When You're Sober" was shot in Los Angeles and is based on the fairy tale Little Red Riding Hood. The Open Door became available for pre-order on the iTunes Store on August 15, 2006; the music video for "Call Me When You're Sober" was also made available." No sources at all for this.
 * The band played a "secret show". What is a secret show? What made it a secret?
 * "Between April and July 2012, Evanescence toured in Europe and North America, with additional stops in Africa and the Middle East." Unsourced.
 * "Wind-up Records" is wiki linked three times.
 * In other media
 * "It later received wide release as a digital download on February 23, 2010.". Source? Also how well did the single perform? No indication is given.


 * That's all the issues I see. I have not checked sources. Freikorp (talk) 22:59, 2 November 2016 (UTC)