Wikipedia:Peer review/F-4 Phantom II/archive1

F-4 Phantom II
A fairly expansive article on a prominent Cold War icon. Would appreciate feedback on improving it to FA quality. - Emt147 Burninate!  04:35, 6 February 2006 (UTC)
 * Hi! Nice work.  For openers, I would move the long list of nicknames out of the intro, maybe keeping one or two.  The status of the plane as a record-breakers is notable and should be mentioned in the intro (something like, "Immediately upon being put into service, the F4 shattered the world records for...").  Also, sections with only one subsection look awkward.  Better if you can subdivide each section into two or more subs, IMO.  Kaisershatner 20:00, 6 February 2006 (UTC)
 * Also, if you're looking for FA status, inline citations are pretty much required. Kaisershatner 20:02, 6 February 2006 (UTC)


 * Thanks for the feedback! I'll work on implementing those changes. In-line refs are a bit hard to do because there are so many books on the subject. Donald Lake's "Spirit in the Skies" is a good synthesis of the information that I cited for anyone wanting to read more on the type. I'd loathe to have all inline refs point to the Lake book because it would appear that the article is written from it which is not the case. - Emt147 Burninate!  20:24, 6 February 2006 (UTC)