Wikipedia:Peer review/Flight planning/archive1

Flight planning
I have written this article from scratch over the last few weeks, and would appreciate having other Wikipedians cast their eyes over it (other articles I have contributed to have benefitted greatly from other editors).

I work for a major flight planning bureau service.
 * Please check for bias/POV.
 * I can't reveal trade secrets by referencing internal company documents or quoting internally-developed equations.

Thank you in advance for your efforts. Murray Langton 14:10, 22 March 2006 (UTC)

Thanks, AndyZ 23:41, 22 March 2006 (UTC)
 * The lead is way too long- please see WP:LEAD.
 * safety-critical shouldn’t be in bold.
 * Too many extra spaces between sections
 * Per WP:MoS, the first letter of the first word of a heading should be captalized, even if it isn’t a proper noun
 * The heading “What is a Route?” isn’t very appropriate; headings generally aren’t questions
 * Very, very list-weighty, some of the lists should be converted to prose
 * What kind of a citation format is being used for the reference? Please see WP:CITE
 * The TOC is huge
 * “Basic terminology” is redundant; should be integrated into rest of article, same with navigation terminology
 * Lacks inline citations (see WP:FOOTNOTE)
 * I see screens of black text and almost no wikification, mostly towards the bottom
 * Prose is rather poor- contains fragments, disorganized

Hi AndyZ, thank you for your comments and suggestions. Looks as if I have a few weeks worth of re-organisation and tidying up to do. Murray Langton 09:07, 23 March 2006 (UTC)