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Fort Concho


This here is an article about a Old West frontier fort I wrote two years ago, and took to GA about a year ago. I've listed this article for peer review because I want to proceed to FAC, and I need some fresh eyes. I've... spent several days on this. On top of all the work I've done prior. Look forward to hearin' from y'all. 🤠

Thanks, ♠Vami  _IV†♠  11:14, 10 March 2021 (UTC)


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 * Looked over this at GA, can look at PR. However, before I do, have you considered nominating at WP:MILHIST/ACR, where you may get more input. Eddie891 Talk Work 00:43, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
 * I have not; I view MILHIST/ACR as a redundant process. If you think that would be best, though, I will respect your informed opinion as a MILHIST Coord. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  01:49, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
 * I mean, I'd consider it pretty comparable to Peer review with a higher chance of getting feedback quicker, though your mileage may vary. Eddie891 Talk Work 02:08, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

Vami, an interesting article. I'm happy to try and give it a quick copy-editing scrub for you, if that would be useful? Hchc2009 (talk) 20:43, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
 * I would appreciate it. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  00:13, 17 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Will give it a shot. As ever, please feel free to revert anything that you don't think is an improvement etc. If I don't think something's clear to me, I'll leave a tag in the text with an explanation. Hchc2009 (talk) 19:41, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

Comments from SandyGeorgia

 * MOS:CAPTIONS, this caption should end in a period, and don't tell readers what to note ... Enlisted Men's Barracks 1 and 2. Note the boarded-up sally port in the center of Barracks 2 ... how about recasting to avoid the need for puncutation with ... Enlisted Men's Barracks 1 and 2 with boarded-up sally port in the center of Barracks 2
 * ✅ Removed the "note" part. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  02:29, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Why is a U.S. installation written in American English using dmy instead of mdy date formatting?
 * I was unaware of region-specific dating formats; I've just always used dmy. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  02:29, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
 * MOS:DATETIES ... I can easily switch them by script if you like. Sandy Georgia  (Talk)  03:04, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Hm. I dislike mdy, but the MOS has spoken. Make it so. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  07:31, 20 March 2021 (UTC)

That's all I've got; might want to look at this one. Sandy Georgia (Talk)  18:25, 19 March 2021 (UTC)
 * I can take a look. I'm a bit busy in RL (accounting student during tax season), so it might be a slow-ish process. Hog Farm Talk 00:05, 20 March 2021 (UTC)


 * WP:MOSNUM, the article mentions 3,000 soldiers (with comma), but $3000 and $6000 (without comma). Use the comma to be consistent.  Sandy Georgia  (Talk)  02:26, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
 * ✅ Good catch! – ♠Vami _IV†♠  15:01, 21 March 2021 (UTC)

HF

 * "But, with the discovery of gold in California in 1849" - the discovery occurred in early 1848, I believe
 * Ah, yup. Oops. My source just said that folk started crossing West Texas in 1849 because of the gold rush. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  15:58, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "This phase of frontier history ended three years later with the beginning of the American Civil War," - Confused here. Evidently, there's an 1858 event you're referring to, but it isn't mentioned
 * This is an edit scar; turns out that 1858 date was the establishment of the Butterfield-Overland Route. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  15:58, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
 * " that resulted in Cram's having Ficklin arrested." - don't think you need the apostrophe
 * – ♠Vami _IV†♠  15:58, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "In 1875, the parade ground was cleared and a " - link parade ground. First appearance in the body, and it's a bit of a jargon term
 * ✅ – ♠Vami _IV†♠  15:58, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "He moved the regimental headquarters to Fort Richardson a month later" - Is Fort Richardson (Texas) the correct team?
 * Yes; it's already linked in "Construction", though. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  15:58, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
 * " McLaughlen set out again with two companies of the 4th Cavalry and one of the 11th Infantry and confirmed Wilson's report" - Who is McLaughlen
 * Another edit scar; Capt. Napoleon B McLaughlen, 4th US Cavalry. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  15:58, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "After Mackenzie and Hatch met with General Christopher C. Augur" - What was Augur's official rank? General wasn't an exact title in the US Army at this point
 * Brigadier Gen. My existing sources didn't have it, but TSHA Online did. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  15:58, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Ditto with Sheridan later
 * As with Augur, so with Sheridan. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  15:58, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Link Fort Sill
 * ✅ – ♠Vami _IV†♠  15:58, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "ordered five expeditionary forces of more than 3,000 soldiers into the South Plains" - 3000 total or 3000 each?
 * ✅ Each. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  15:58, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
 * " Stockton, Fort Davis, Quitman, and Clark, " - Would Fort Clark (Texas) be the right link
 * Yup. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  23:26, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "Interested locals appealed in vain to the federal government to make Fort Concho a permanent installation" - Why did they want it to be a permanent installation?
 * My sources do not say. – ♠Vami _IV†♠  23:26, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "one-story dormitories with attached kitchen and mess hall to the north of each barrack." - "with an"
 * ✅ – ♠Vami _IV†♠  23:26, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "About 50 feet (15 m) of the headquarters building is the residence of Oscar Ruffini" - I find the use of is to be odd here, as Ruffini has been dead for over 60 years
 * I've added "former". – ♠Vami _IV†♠  23:26, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Ref 54 I think the publisher should be San Angelo Standard-Times.
 * ✅ – ♠Vami _IV†♠  23:26, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
 * TSAL date from the infobox doesn't seem to have a citation. Also, what's TSAL?
 * – ♠Vami _IV†♠  23:26, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
 * The NRHP listing never seems to be directly mentioned in the article body
 * – ♠Vami _IV†♠  23:26, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
 * I'm not an image reviewer myself, but I have a bit of an idea on what to expect from a FAC image review. Expect there to be a request for the cattle trails map to have a more specific source than just the NPS
 * I looked into this and found no indication that the map was from the NPS (a Google search for it turned up nothing). – ♠Vami _IV†♠  23:26, 21 March 2021 (UTC)

That's my comments. Hog Farm Talk 01:55, 21 March 2021 (UTC)