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Fortumo

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This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I want to make sure that it's not perceived as an ad, as it's concerning a company on the global market. I will be glad to receive comments about possible improvements, if you think that it is not neutral enough etc.

Thanks, Branev (talk) 16:05, 22 June 2009 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: This is very short so I think it would rate as a start or stub class article, but seems to meet notability - see WP:NN. Here are some suggestions for improvement. Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 16:27, 26 June 2009 (UTC)
 * Much of the article is not referenced - the whole COverage section with its list of countries where it operates for example. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
 * Per WP:CITE references come AFTER punctuation with no space, and are usually at the end of a sentence or phrase, so fix things like Fortumo is an international mobile payment portal [1][2], offering...
 * Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. cite web and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
 * The country names are both in bold face and wikilinked, but per WP:ITALIC should not be bolded.
 * There is some information in the infobox that is not in the article and seems like a way of expanding it somewhat - for example the CEO's name or the HQ being in Estonia.
 * I am also not really clear what the company does - what is a premium SMS payment service? How does it work? Who are the customers?