Wikipedia:Peer review/Frederik David Holleman/archive1

Frederik David Holleman
I've listed this article for peer review because this is my first substantive article. I have already written one other article on a similar topic (Johan Frederik Holleman), with several more coming. I'd like to get feedback before I am too far in this project. Thanks, Francoisdjvr (talk) 10:10, 21 March 2016 (UTC)

by Editør
 * Since the entire article is a biography, the article could be divided into sections with more meaningful headings, such as 'Early life', 'Academic career', or any other that you think are appropriate. Sometimes this requires rewriting parts of the text, but it will often improve readability and searchability of the article.
 * Parts of the article have inline citations but other parts are unreferenced. It is often easiest to add source references while writing the article, and it becomes clear to the reader what the information is based on. (You can use the same footnote more than once: WP:REFNAME; but this was already used for one of the refs.)
 * The lead refers to Holleman as both "Dutch and South African", what is this based on?
 * In the Dutch East Indies, did Holleman first live on (East) Java?

Success with the article! – Editør (talk) 09:32, 24 March 2016 (UTC)