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Free Collars Kingdom

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 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for February 2009.

This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because, mainly, I want to fix any problems it may have, as well as get a second opinion on prose and comprehensiveness. I also feel as though the lede needs some work, and that the release information may belong elsewhere in the article.

Thanks, WhiteArcticWolf (talk) 15:31, 28 February 2009 (UTC)


 * Comments by
 * Needs a media section which should contain the release information, and the volume list.
 * The character section seems unnecessary for a three volume series. I'd recommend just smerging it into the plot as it really isn't adding any new information; if kept, drop the bolding as its distracting and, I believe, against the general MoS.
 * The paragraph on the extras seems extraneous and unnecessary, its almost trivia; I'd drop all together. It isn't noted in other series articles nor volumes lists, in general.
 * Is that Geocities site really an official site for this series? That seems odd; the ann link should be put in the template.
 * Also, its missing some standard cats for a manga series

Other than that, the refs need a little clean up (some have some minor typos in the titles), and have a general copyedit done. I'd also see if you could find at least one more review of the series, as the bulk is all from Mania.com. Only two reviews is barely over the line of notability, so a third would be good. With that done, I'd say it be ready for a GA review, at the min. -- Collectonian  (talk · contribs) 03:23, 1 March 2009 (UTC)
 * I created a media section, though I left out volume summaries. I'm not sure whether or not I should add them; the plot is on the page already, and the way the volumes are set up, each chapter has an entirely new conflict. I wouldn't want it to feel like there were too many "later"s and "soon after"s and so on.
 * I'll attempt to merge the character section, and depending on it's quality and what it looks like, I'll decide whether to keep it merged or keep it as-is. I did remove the bolding, however.
 * The "extras" bit in the production section has been removed.
 * The Geocities link is what is given in the third volume of the series; the author claims it is his site. However, that was in 2004 and the site says nothing about Free Collars Kingdom. Even the blog links to another author. I decided to remove it, anyway, as it wasn't clear who it belonged to and there wasn't anything about the series.
 * New cats were added.
 * I've cleaned up the refs and switched them around when necessary, so that a reference to the first volume comes before one to the third volume.
 * A copyedit tag has been added, and I've listed it on the "Article to Copyedit" section on the anime/manga cleanup task force page.
 * I'll look for more reviews, though I'm not sure how many more exist. I've added one from School Library Journal, but I'm unsure if it's reputable or not. It would seem so, though, as it is shown on Barnes and Noble's page for the series.
 * Thank you! WhiteArcticWolf (talk) 14:57, 1 March 2009 (UTC)
 * Since its only 3 volumes, I agree it doesn't need individual volume summaries. I went through and did some fixes on the web references, the title should be the actual title (and added language where needed). And yep, SLJ is a reliable source. -- Collectonian  (talk · contribs) 15:23, 1 March 2009 (UTC)
 * Thank you for improving the article! And it's nice to know the SLJ is a reliable source; I've been debating on whether or not to use it for several other articles. Is there anything else that should be improved/fixed? WhiteArcticWolf (talk) 15:40, 1 March 2009 (UTC)