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Free Corps (Shannara)
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to discover what else could be done with this page, if anything (improvements, mergers, etc.)or one of the other Shannara articles...Thanks for any help!!!!


 * Also, is the placement of the infobox right? (If it is higher, it makes the  abnormally long.)
 * Lastly, is it even possible to get this to FA-class? (notability issues, etc.)


 * Finally, see the merged article!! Right here. Please review the entire article if possible...

 the_ ed17  15:53, 31 March 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: First off, this review is of the whole article Border Legion (Shannara). Good start, but needs a lot of work to get to GA, with FA even further off (though not impossible, just a lot of work). I am not familiar with the Shannara books, so I am a good jargon detector. Here are some suggestions for improvement: Hope this helps, sounds like these are very exciting books to read, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 21:41, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * The lead is currently one sentence and needs to be expanded to summarize the whole article - see WP:LEAD.
 * I also note that the lead refers to Callahorn's army, but does not identify it - I assumed it was a war leader / general until I clicked on the link and found it is a fictional country. This raises three important points:
 * Provide context for the reader - assume they know nothing but want to learn more. Here explaining that Callahorn is the fictional country would help. See WP:PCR
 * Not quite the case here, but still try to avoid jargon or if it is required, make sure you explain it. See WP:JARGON
 * Most importantly since this is about a fictional subject, write from an out of unvierse perspective. See WP:IN-U. This is already done in some places (identifying it as in a novel in the lead) but needs to be done consistently throughout, especially for GA and FA.
 * References follow puctuation and are usually at the end of a sentence - see WP:CITE Do not have a space between a period and the ref or between refs, and keep refs in numerical order.
 * The references themselves will need the most work and may the most difficult part to find. Currently all of the refs are to the books themselves or to a few websites. This article needs to have independent third-party sources that are about the books and the role of the Border Legion / Free Corps within them. There needs to be independent critical discussion of the books and these units. See WP:RS for reliable sources - not sure the websites listed are reliable in this sense of the word. See also WP:V.
 * Be very careful to back up all remarks with verifiable, reliable sources, otherwise this risks being labeled original reseaarch and will never make GA or FA (and may be deleted).
 * Watch out for POV language - see WP:NPOV. See Stee Jans was one of the pitifully few members of the Free Corps to survive the War of the Forbidding. [40] pitifully few is POV
 * Internet refs need at least url, title, publisher, author (if known) and date accessed.
 * I would try to find a model article that is already FA on a similar topic and use that as a guide to follow. It may be easier to write an article on one of the books first, then if you finsd sources, on the military units within the book(s).