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Full Sail University
Hello! I have been working with Full Sail University to propose improvements to the existing article. I've been upfront about my COI, and rather than editing the main space directly, I've been suggesting changes and updates on the article's talk page. To help get feedback to resolve the tags at the top of the article and look for other ways to improve content from the Wikipedia community's standpoint, I'd like to request a peer review.

A bit about what I've proposed so far, and has been done to update the page. First, a significant amount of unsourced content has been removed (see this edit request and this edit request). I've also proposed improvements to the "History" section, which has resulted in some edits but not all of the suggestions were accepted. (My first request was deemed too large, so I submitted a "sub request" focusing on a smaller chunk of content, and finally, I submitted a request to add mention of one of the school's former official names, and wording around some recognition received.)

At the moment there are 3 tags at the top of the article warning readers about neutrality (or lack thereof), promotional content, and problematic tone. Multiple times, I have asked the editor who added the tags to confirm if the banners are needed and if so, what changes need to be made in the article. To resolve them, I have offered the above-linked requests and stated my goal of resolving concerns and asked for feedback about what's needed to remove the tags. I've pinged multiple talk page participants for feedback, and requested help at WikiProjects Universities and Florida, but received little response.

I'm now requesting a peer review to invite any editors to please provide thoughts on how this article can be improved. Specifically, I'm hoping for some insight on how to address the tags, but I welcome any feedback for improving the article in general. If interested, editors are also invited to weigh in on any of the ongoing talk page discussions. I will be submitting a copy edit request from the Guild of Copy Editors, too, so hopefully that will fix some of the more minor errors so peer review participants can focus on the tags and any other problematic content. Thanks in advance for any help. Inkian Jason (talk) 20:42, 6 July 2018 (UTC)
 * Sharing a quick update: The copy edit has been completed, and since requesting this peer review, two of the warning tags have been removed. One re: neutrality remains, so feedback there specifically would be helpful. Thanks! Inkian Jason (talk) 20:16, 12 July 2018 (UTC)