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Fulla (doll)
Creating page for unregistered contributor to edit. Feel free to delete this if August 1 2007 was a long time ago. Christopher Parham (talk) 06:07, 1 August 2006 (UTC)

I'm striving for good article quality. Is there anything that can be done to improve this article? --71.118.77.30 20:33, 1 August 2006 (UTC)
 * I'd really like to know all the problems in this article so I could try to fix it! So what can be done to improve this article? --71.118.77.30 00:12, 17 August 2006 (UTC)

I think the article is done quite well. There is some repetition in the various sections of its reflectance of muslims values -- I know this is central to the doll, but I still found it repetitive. I would be nice to have an idea of sales figures -- so far only qualitative words along the lines of "very popular" are used. The criticism of women rights advocates and other critics should probably be given its own section -- and it would be useful to show how similar or different criticism of Fulla is to the standard critiques of Barbie. I'm not sure if this is a good idea but one could possibly make a chart/table that compares major statistics of Barbie with Fulla side by side -- such as height, eye color, skin color, bust size (?), clothing types, boyfriend/accessories, date of introduction, sales figures -- although maybe my technical inclination isn't really that useful when applied to an article about a girl's doll. (I just put up another article for peer review so I figured I owed some of the articles here a peer review. I am in no way an expert on girl's dolls.)  --Ben Houston 23:07, 29 August 2006 (UTC)

Thanks, I'll try to fix those problems, but I don't think I'll put in a chart. And I appreciate your review of the article for me. --71.105.5.205 05:03, 30 August 2006 (UTC)
 * Okay, I have added another section called "criticism" and added sales figures. But I don't exactly know how to remove the repetition of Muslim values of the doll.  Is there anyway to remove this problem or is it not that bad? --71.104.176.33 05:35, 31 August 2006 (UTC)

I (quite unexpectedly) really enjoyed reading the article. In my view, it is well written, interesting, and balanced. I agree that it is a little bit repetetive on the subject of Muslim values (although it still maintains interest). Most of the content in the 'Roles' section is repeated elsewhere so perhaps you could remove that section. I think the section itself is fine, but doesn't add anything you haven't covered elsewhere. I would interested in knowing if Fulla and Barbie have been designated IQs by their creators.

I'm glad you enjoyed reading the article, and I'm happy for your review. And I think I'll remove the "Roles" section, since that is where the most repetition is located. And I'm sorry to say that there is no designated IQs from their creators. -71.160.17.156 07:08, 12 September 2006 (UTC)
 * I now removed the "Roles" section, and I also added that Barbie and Fulla have about the same worldwide sales in the "Differences with Barbie" section. So is there anything else in the article that can be improved upon?  Or is the repetetiveness of of Muslim values still a strong problem? Does anyone think this article would be ready to be a good article?  --71.105.13.64 18:47, 12 September 2006 (UTC)