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FutureSex/LoveSounds

 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for July 2009.
 * A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for July 2009.

This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to know what can be improved on it and especially how it can be made suitable for the featured article criteria. I feel there are numerous problems with the article but would like to know if anyone else feels this way.

Thank you, StephenBHedges (talk) 19:53, 15 July 2009 (UTC)

Comments from TechOutsider

Ok, I've heard of this album before, listened to exactly one song on it, so sorta have a strangers perspective to this album. I hope I bring a fresh perspective to this article. Minor things I may fix myself.


 * Should it be "released by", not "released on"?
 * "took place during", should it be "took place from"?
 * Wikilink "hiatus"
 * "succeeded expectations"; what were the expectations?
 * "and spawned"; I believe "Cry Me a River" spawned from Justified itself.
 * A lot of adjectives; be sure those adjectives can be justified by a reference. Don't pull words out of your mind to describe a situation.

Looked at your pictures and media rationales, they checked out. I forgot to check the article class before this review, and the prose surprised me while reading. I pulled up the discussion page and found it was GA-class, no wonder. If the editors actively involved in this article are willing to take it to FA-class, I believe that is a) possible and b) easily feasible. Good luck. TechOutsider (talk • contribs) 21:11, 19 July 2009 (UTC)