Wikipedia:Peer review/Géza Gárdonyi/archive1

Géza Gárdonyi
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because it can still be a good article.

Thanks, 1s9s9s4s0823 (talk) 23:56, 20 August 2010 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: Thanks for your interest in this article - I see you have never edited it, so I hope these suggestions for improvement are used by someone to help make the article better. Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 03:49, 25 August 2010 (UTC)
 * The lead is too short and should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way.
 * Biggest problem with this becoming a GA is that it has no (zero) references. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
 * Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. cite web and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
 * Another problem with this becoming a WP:GA is that it is not broad in its coverage - there is very little material in the Life section. The WP:FA criterion is that it must be comprehensive, which this is nowhere near.
 * What was the name of his college? When did he attend it and graduate? Where was he a teacher and cantor? What are some of the critical repsonses to his works?
 * The language is also in need of a copyedit - GA and FA need very good to professional level English
 * I see that the Hungarian article is a FA, but do not speak Magyar. It looks like it would be an excellent souce for expansion of this article as it is full of material and seems to be well-cited.
 * A model article is useful for ideas and examples to follow. In the ENglish WIkipedia there are several FAs on authors that would make potentially good models.
 * It is hard to say much more as the article is fairly short and has no inline refs.