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Gaelic Athletic Association
Overall review of this artical, how it currently is and what improvements are needed (Gnevin 15:14, 23 November 2006 (UTC))

balloonman

 * Expand the introductory section. You should generally have 3-4 paragraphs worth of information to tell us what is important and to convince us to read the rest of the article.
 * GAA in the 20th century needs to be expanded. And is "it" the GAA?
 * Achievements needs to cleaned up. The sentences are entirely too long which makes for complex reading.  For example, The ancient game of hurling was saved from extinction and both it and Gaelic football were standardised, albeit that both standardised games, but in particular Gaelic Football, bore little resemblance to the original sports.
 * Some of the issues in Achievements needs to be elaborated upon, for example, what does it mean to provide a mechanism for the creation of a sense of Irish identity. That is one of those cliche phrases that has little firm meaning...
 * The list of GAA's needs to be redone. It is too long... a table or columns should be considered.Balloonman 05:54, 24 November 2006 (UTC)


 * Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, AZ t 19:18, 24 November 2006 (UTC)