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Germany women's national football team

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This peer review discussion has been closed. I've recently translated the German page of this article and I am wondering how it might be improved further. I used the FA Scotland national football team as a model in parts.

Thanks, EnemyOfTheState (talk) 23:27, 12 August 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: I am not a sports editor, but this looks pretty good to me. Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here. Looks well referenced and sources also look generally good. Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 04:23, 19 August 2008 (UTC)
 * I think the lead could be expanded a bit. None of the Early history seems to be in the lead, for example. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way. Also places where it says "currently" should give a date "as of August 2008". Please see WP:LEAD
 * Per WP:MOS, images outside the infobox should be set to thumb width to allow reader preferences to take over. For portrait format images, "vertical" can be used to make the image narrower.
 * Some adjectives may be seen as POV - easily in winning easily 6–0 over Mexico. or suffered in At the 1995 Women's World Cup in Sweden, the German team suffered a loss against the Scandinavian hosts, or Germany again met Italy in the semi-final, this time winning comfortably 3–0. Also watch for WP:JARGON such as friendly in losing 0–3 to Czechoslovakia in a friendly on May 9, 1990.
 * Article needs a copyedit to polish things - for example She was not unquestioned at first, and she was particularly criticised before the start of the 2007 World Cup, after disappointing results at the Four Nations Tournament and the Algarve Cup.[35] is just awkward. Or "joined" is meant in After German reunification, the East German football association joint the DFB. Try reading the article out loud or asking for help at WP:PRV