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Gilbert Mackereth
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because I feel the article is at GA standard.

Thanks, Pennine rambler (talk) 01:25, 22 May 2012 (UTC)

Both these need clearing up, I think. Tim riley (talk) 12:42, 22 May 2012 (UTC)
 * Date of birth: both Who's Who and The Times obituary give his date of birth as 19 October 1893.
 * Parents: both the above say that his father was a Fellow of the Royal Society - not something you'd expect in a bank manager. Who's Who states that his mother was called Muriel
 * Curiouser and curiouser. There's no-one called Mackereth in the list of FRSs List of Fellows of the Royal Society M,N,O. Can Who's Who and The Times have both been wrong? Tim riley (talk) 12:00, 23 May 2012 (UTC)
 * I'll bet it was the Royal Society of Arts. That mistake has been made before. Brianboulton (talk) 23:26, 26 May 2012 (UTC)


 * Comments from Nikkimaria
 * Given the length of the article, four paragraphs is a bit long for the lead
 * Spell out WW1
 * Any more information on his early life?
 * Some general copy-editing needed, especially for punctuation
 * "He returned to the Middle East in 1933 when he was appointed to be consul for the Sanjaks of Damascus, Horns, Hama, and of the Hauran and the Governorate of the Djebel Druze on 10 January" - you'll need to explain this
 * Tagged dead link should be addressed
 * Not sure this or this would be considered reliable sources. Nikkimaria (talk) 17:10, 2 June 2012 (UTC)