Wikipedia:Peer review/Gloucester County, Virginia/archive1

Gloucester County, Virginia
I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to know if it's GA material, my friend and I also wanted to know what we should do if it's not. We've been working very hard on it, and the only problem we can see is the limited source pool.

Thanks,

-- Kkr ouni  /Ккроуни  /ΚκρΩυνι  00:21, 24 August 2007 (UTC)

DeLarge
General recommendations:
 * Have a look at WP:Citing sources to see if you can improve the format of the referencing a little.
 * Don't force the image thumbnail sizes unless absolutely necessary (see WP:MOS). (Did this myself)
 * ✅ Add more wikilinks, especially in the Guinea and Daffodils sections.

Specific recommendations:
 * You could realistically cover the list of schools with a single reference to the gets.gc.k12.va.us index page.
 * Well, I could, but the people I've asked about refrences tell me that it's best to have a large number of specific refrences.
 * While prose text is usually good, it might be an idea to convert some of the data in the Demographics section to a table. However, you can also add to that section to make sure it's not just a table. Don't just say how young/old/black/white/rich/poor people are in the area. Use your sources to explain why the demographic makeup of the county is the way it is, and perhaps also make comparisons with the nationwide averages, for context.
 * I would, and I tried, but I suck at that type of organization. I did 3 tables, but they are very poor.  I'll keep on it though, but with previews.
 * ✅ I'd upload Image:GloucesterMainStreet.JPG again. It has a large area of whitespace to the right, and it's of very grainy quality. To be honest, the image doesn't really add anything to the article; would it be possible to take a photograph of the Main Street instead, so that it better illustrates the text it sits besides.
 * ✅ The number of single sentence paragraphs, especially in the lead, jumps out at me immediately. Try and rewrite it so that it's covered in 1-2 paragraphs, and get everything to flow together a little better. The same is true of the Tourism section, which doesn't need four subheadings when each section is so short.

These last two comments will involve the most work; maybe even a complete rewrite:
 * The lead mentions that "several notable events occurred in the city", but the History section doesn't really explain much in depth.
 * I only see two major references; www.gloucesterva.info and gets.gc.k12.va.us. If there's a local library, there's going to be no better sources than the books in there. Despite what you often see on WP, the best references are often not online, and your librarian will be absolutely delighted to assist you here. He/she might well have a lot more local knowledge to add as well. That could allow you to expand the History section (as above), which is where the greatest general interest will be. The more you can expand that, the easier it'll be to cut back on other sections -- the Schools section, by contrast, is way too detailed, and of little interest to any WP reader who isn't a Gloucester County resident with kids.

Hope all that helps, --DeLarge 01:22, 27 August 2007 (UTC)
 * I'll get on it as quick as I can. Thanks! -- Kkrouni  /こかるに  /Ккроуни  /ΚκρΩυνι  20:57, 27 August 2007 (UTC)


 * Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR t 02:06, 15 September 2007 (UTC)