Wikipedia:Peer review/Goa/archive2

Goa

 * Previous peer review

This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because we want to improve this important article, which was a former FA.

Thanks, Kensplanet TC 07:40, 26 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments Hometech (talk) 14:32, 31 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Move the coat of arms somewhere else or remove. (at least out of history)
 * I don't like the malgaadi img; also there are two road imgs.
 * religion box is too wide.

Maxim comments Nowhere near FA, and approaching but not yet near GA standards. I'll give some pointers nonetheless:
 * Look over the FAR -- copyediting and citations are still issues
 * While Goa isn't a country in its own right, I will suggest an article like United States as a good example to follow.
 * The TOC is much too big (relates to FA criterion 2b). Make the subdivisions and flora/fauna section subsections of the Geography section; Transport & Tourism into Economy; Languages, Education --> Demographics; Sports, Media --> Culture.
 * Needs copyeditng for flow (get rid of choppy sentences, get connection between them so they flow, as well as connection between paragraphs; see User:Tony1/How to improve your writing for a guide to doing this).
 * The Architecture section contains a maintenance template related to tone.
 * Random example: "During March 2008 Goa was lashed with heavy rain and strong winds. This was the first time in 29 years that Goa had seen rain during March." --> "Goa experienced a heavy rainstorm in March 2008, which was the first time in 29 years that Goa had seen rain during the month of March."
 * There are serious citations issues: many sections are uncited, or have one or two references and there are some [citation needed] tags. An excellent rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref (taken from Ruhrfisch).

Hope this helps,  Maxim (talk)  21:54, 31 August 2009 (UTC)