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God's Son

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This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because it is currently up for GAN and i think it contains enough information to make a FA. I would appreciate a peer review to find out where the article needs to improved to make it a FAC.

Thanks, Guerilla In Tha Mist (talk) 20:03, 13 May 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: I have heard of Nas, but do not know this album. The article has a lot of information and here are some suggestions for improvement: Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch &gt;&lt;&gt; &deg; &deg; 01:56, 19 May 2008 (UTC)
 * A model article is often useful for ideas to follow on style, refs, structure, etc. There are several album FAs at Featured_articles including Enta da Stage and Enter the Wu-Tang (36 Chambers), which may be useful models.
 * Per WP:LEAD the lead should be two or three paragraphs - I think the current lead could be expanded. My rule of thumb is that every header should be mentioned in the lead in some way, even if it is only a word or phrase. For example, Singles, and Production do not seem to be in the lead.
 * Article needs a copyedit - for example Inot a complete list): It reached #12 on the Billboard 200,[1] and obtained a platinum certification from the RIAA a month after it was released.[2] (obtained is an odd verb here), or Although guest appearances are made by Kelis, Alicia Keys, and others, God's Son is considered to be a personal album, in which he covers lyrical themes of his own emotional experiences[3] needs a period and could start something like Although Kelis, Alicia Keys, and others make guest appearances... - this avoids passive voice too. Or In December, Nas appeared in the video for a 2Pac single, "Thugz Mansion (N.Y.)," a song of which an alternative version was later released on God's Son, featuring two verses from Nas and only one from 2Pac. needs to be cleaned up.
 * Article needs more references in a few places - otherwise they sound like original research - for example During 2002, fans and critics speculated that Nas was still willing to make commercial music as he started associating himself with artists from Murder Inc., a pop rap distributing label. - who were these critics? cite them please Not sure if fans speculation is notable.
 * Article needs more specific info for some refs: Although God's Son is rarely considered to be Nas' best album, some consider it to be a notch below Illmatic and Stillmatic.[3][14] It is considered to be highly emotional and personal, but some consider Nas' self-involvement to be a weakness.[3] I would be more specific - who considers it to be his best album? Who considers it a notch below? etc.
 * I do not think that copy vio lyrics sources (ohhla.com) should be linked to and doubt they would be considered WP:RS
 * Ref 24 needs more information - publisher? Youtube is also not generally a reliable source.