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Grammy Award for Best Metal Performance
This peer review discussion has been closed. I've listed this article for peer review because… I want to know how this list should be expanded, what should I write? And the tables?

Thanks,  C  anniba loki  16:36, 2 December 2009 (UTC)

Brianboulton comments: What the article most lacks is a proper lead. Have you looked at featured lists of music awards (per WP:FL) to see the kind of information included in their leads?
 * In this case, the lead should at least say who is responsible for the Grammy awards. No prior knowledge should be assumed.
 * I expanded the text a bit, what do you think?--  C  anniba loki  23:36, 16 December 2009 (UTC)


 * The lead should also provide a brief commentary on the 20 years of the award; for example some of the information in your "Category facts" section should be textualised.
 * I did, but I think it can be better.--  C  anniba loki  23:36, 16 December 2009 (UTC)


 * The sentence beginning "Years reflect the year in which..." should be a footnote linked to the tables rather than a sentence in the lead. The citation for this fact should be properly formatted, not left as a bare link.
 * I think this sentence can be arranged as an introduction text to the tables (I had this idea after your comments).--  C  anniba  loki  23:36, 16 December 2009 (UTC)


 * Has there been no press or magazine comments over the years, on these awards? These could provide useful sources for facts incorporated into the lead.
 * I added a bit.--  C  anniba loki  23:36, 16 December 2009 (UTC)


 * The tables look neat, but there is some confusion with the sources. Your main source seems to suffer from a mix-up over years. For example, it repeats 2006 information in 2007, which casts doubt on its factual reliabilty. Since most of the information comes from this source, this is a potential problem.
 * Can I use rockonthenet.com as a general source?--  C  anniba loki  23:36, 16 December 2009 (UTC)


 * I can't find what your source is for the 1989 data, where Jethro Tull is indicated as the winner.
 * As to whether the information on the tables can be expanded, the only thing I can think of is to indicate the albums from which the award tracks are taken. Would that be useful information?
 * Yes, I added ("track from?").--  C  anniba loki  23:36, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

I hope the above is of some use to you. I am not able to watch my peer reviews at the moment, but if you want to raise anything with me, please call my talkpage. Brianboulton (talk) 00:35, 8 December 2009 (UTC)