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Green Wing Special
I am trying to get this article up to FA status. I am not sure how this article can be improved, but if anyone has any advice then it will be most welcome.

Thanks,

ISD (talk) 14:58, 19 November 2007 (UTC)

Review by Brad
Points for improvement: A couple of stylistic suggestions: Brad (talk) 19:57, 19 November 2007 (UTC)
 * The reception section is underdeveloped. Instead of referencing the "Green Wing newsletter" (at British Sitcom Guide, which is no more a reliable source than Wikipedia) you ought to reference the original publication directly (e.g., instead of sourcing the Ian Johns quote to BSG, source it to The Times (and say "Ian Johns of The Times...") )
 * Merge the alternate ending section with the production section
 * Expand the production section. Who wrote it? Who directed it? When was it filmed? (hint: at the same time as the second series)
 * A primary sources (the episode itself) is fine for a plot section but it doesn't hurt to use a secondary source. However, sourcing the plot to "Green Wing Special" when the article is on the same topic seems a bit weird. Consider excising the plot sources altogether or finding a written description elsewhere to reference.
 * I'd lose the subheadings in the plot section and just head the plot routes with "in the second plot strand" or similar
 * Add to the top right corner, slap the title card in there and lose the DVD cover.
 * The cast section seems a bit out of place just sitting at the bottom. Perhaps move it below the plot section and add the main cast?


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Comments from Stardust8212
The article seems to need a general copyedit, I noticed some issues particularly in the production and reception sections ("The views of critics was...", "Some thought the special concentrate...", etc.). I also question whether the cast list is necessary, was the garage attendant a major character or was the actor a particularly special guest? You might consider merging notes about significant guest appearances into the production section or adding Infobox Television episode and including the guests there. I would also recommend adding information on who wrote and directed the episode either in an infobox or the production section. Best of luck with your FA run. Stardust8212 02:21, 2 December 2007 (UTC)